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writeALONG!10 October

A TUESDAY FEATURE

hosts: Muskaan Ahuja, Lakshmi Iyer

guest editor: Daipayan Nair


Please note:


Only the unpublished poems (that are never published on any social media platform/journals/anthologies) posted here for each prompt will be considered for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal -- haikuKATHA, each month.


Poets are requested to post poems that adhere to the prompts/exercises given.


Only 1 poem to be posted in 24 hours. Total 2 poems per poet are allowed each week (numbered 1,2). So, revise your poems till 'words obey your call'.


If a poet wants feedback, then the poet must mention 'feedback welcome' below each poem that is being posted.


Responses are usually a mixture of grain and chaff. The poet has to be discerning about what to take for the final version of the poem or the unedited version will be picked up for the journal.


The final version should be on top of the original version for selection.


Poetry is a serious business. Give you best attempt to feature in haikuKATHA !!


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"There may be times when we are powerless to prevent injustice, but there must never be a time when we fail to protest"


– Elie Wiesel


Voicing one's stand on socially relevant issues is something I have always advocated in Haikai, especially in Senryu writing. Free verse poets have been doing so for centuries, be it a protest against the current regime, against a grave injustice or an atrocity done in any form, against domestic violence etc. I have always believed the three lines, if crafted and polished well enough, can become sharper than a knife.


The role of a strong pivot becomes the fulcrum of such a senryu. In other words, let the pain and emotion inside you become the pivot. The shock should be great enough to dismantle the conscience of the reader.


Today, I invite you all to revisit your conscience and raise your important voice on any issue you think is relevant in today's society and which needs to be addressed.


I am leaving you all with such a powerful senryu recently published in haikuNetra Journal edited and co-edited by me and Lev Hart respectively:



fingers scraping

the inside of a cantaloupe

gang rape

--- Muskaan Ahuja


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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
Oct 14, 2023

fifty cows

milked

by a rotolactor a new mother


#2

Feedback is welcome.

L 2 is a pivot.

Yes! You can see I'm cheesed off with human beings living on cow's products and calling themselves 'pure' vegetarians. I was one of them until 5 years back :((

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
Oct 15, 2023
Replying to

True, Sumitra.

Demand creates supply.

Supposing there was no demand for cow's milk, won't we stop milking the cows?


Now, the demand is only increasing - what with milk, yoghurt, cheese, and ghee consumption on the rise.

??

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Bonnie J Scherer
Bonnie J Scherer
Oct 13, 2023

#2 13/10/2023 feedback welcome


standardized tests

in a world of inequality

the unwritten rules


Bonnie J Scherer

USA

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
Oct 14, 2023
Replying to

A bit telly?

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Keiko Izawa
Keiko Izawa
Oct 13, 2023

#2


edit: (with many thanks to Lev)


racist mob

the master pianist's hands

paralyzed


original:

covid violence

the asian pianist’s hands

paralyzed


Keiko Izawa, Japan


Note: based on the story of an attacked pianist.


feedback appreciated.

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Keiko Izawa
Keiko Izawa
Oct 15, 2023
Replying to

Thank you, Lev. I agree with you on the revised version, because the point is racism whether it’s from Covid or not.

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marilyn ashbaugh
marilyn ashbaugh
Oct 12, 2023

#2 12/10/23 feedback please

american way free and open school shooting Marilyn Ashbaugh, USA

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Sandip Chauhan
Sandip Chauhan
Oct 12, 2023

#2 - 10/12/2023 metropolis's chaos

tiny hands tirelessly toil

beneath neon lights Sandip Chauhan USA feedback welcome

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