A TUESDAY FEATURE
hosts: Muskaan Ahuja, Lakshmi Iyer
guest editor: an'ya
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Here is a haiku that embodies Orville Reddenbocker's quote:
“A good idea is not enough, execution is key.”
Not only is the content of this haiku striking in its natural simplicity and poetic rhythm, but in addition, the execution of that content is key.
What makes this an exceptionally stellar haiku is that the kigo "autumn moonlight" deepens the “aha” moment via the last line with the words "in solitude." The opossum, or "possum,” as it’s called in North America, is a nocturnal creature that epitomizes solitude insofar as the definition: "remoteness from habitations, as of a time or place; and the absence of
human activity".
Luckily, the poet must have been up late at night and able to observe this animal. To be a part of its solitude and yet be adept enough not to insert herself into the haiku, is as pure as a haiku can be. In addition, the skillful use of "m" and “o” sounds with the words "autumn, moonlight, possum, and solitude" is a real bonus:
autumn moonlight
a possum walks the fence
in solitude
--- larisa Worthington
Haiku Prompt: Be inspired to write your own haiku that represents an "aha" moment of solitude that you've shared with something in nature without placing yourself directly in the haiku. If possible, see if you can also use some kind of repeating sounds.
#Revision 1
12-02-24
fresh rose petal
fluttering to earth...
a world in itself
Thank you @tanka anya for your feedback.
#2
12-02-24
fresh rose petal
fluttering on earth...
a story in itself
Padma Priya
India
Feedback welcome
duck gone
the little lift before
it dove
an'ya
blue sky
between winter rains--
joggers everywhere
Linda Papanicolaou, US
#2, 2/10/24
#2, 10/2, revised, trying a duostich, thanks Lev!
paper weight
the burden of an apology letter
9/2, original
paper weight the burden of an apology letter
Lakshmi Iyer, India
just wanted to learn about this ku, if possible, its very close to me
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