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THE HAIBUN GALLERY: 30th November 2023 — Gavin Austin, featured poet

hosts: Firdaus Parvez & Kala Ramesh

A Thursday Feature.

poet of the month: Gavin Austin

30th November 2023



Gavin Austin lives in Sydney, Australia. His work has been widely published in anthologies and journals, and he has been recognised in literary competitions. In 2016, Gavin was awarded a Writing Fellow of the FAW NSW Inc., and was the Featured Poet in the January 2016 issue of cattails. Also, he was the Poet in Focus 57, Presence #72, March 2022. The Drifting Sands Special Feature, Girt by Sea was Gavin’s undertaking; a partnership of his photography and poetry from Australian writers. He currently has two published poetry collections: Shadow Play, Dragonwick, Aus., and changing light, Alba Publishing, UK. Gavin was shortlisted for a Touchstone Award 2022 for Individual Poem. He is currently completing a collection of haibun and haiku, which he hopes to publish late 2023. You can find Gavin in The Poet’s Hub Gavin Austin – Drifting Sands Haibun – Poet's Hub (drifting-sands-haibun.org)

Unlocked

Most of his dreams are black and white. Yet, when he is left alone to disappear, falling into the abyss within, he dreams with a kaleidoscope of singing colours. Perhaps his truths should be translated, transcribed into some universal language?

Night finds him propped-up in a doorway, waiting for his dreams; sleeve hitched, belt around his left bicep. A gnawing need, hopeless as the madman’s cries haunting empty winter streets, until the colours explode through his veins; sing in his head.

intersection

a neon sign flashes

its silent tale


Drifting Sands #6, December 2020



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Prompt

Dreams! Talk to us about yours!


Haibun outside this prompt is welcome too

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Important: Since we're swamped with submissions, and our editors are only human, mistakes can happen. Please, please, remember to put your name, followed by your country, below each poem, even after revisions. It helps our editors; they won't have to type it in, saving them from potential typos. Thanks a ton!


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PLEASE NOTE:

1. Only two haibun per poet per prompt. Please put your name and country of residence under your poem, it makes the editors' work easier. Thanks.

2. Share your best-polished pieces.

3. Please do not post something in a hurry or something you have just written.

Let it simmer for a while.

4. When poets give suggestions and if you agree to them - post your final edited version on top of your original version.

5. Don't forget to give feedback on others' poems.


We are delighted to open the comment thread for you to share your unpublished haibun (within 300 words) to be considered for inclusion in the haikuKATHA monthly journal.

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Adelaide Shaw
Adelaide Shaw
06 déc. 2023

Post 1

revised Haiku


THE REST OF MY LIFE


you walk me to my door but say no good night give me no hug no kiss just turn and leave me standing with no explanation no understanding and for days afterwards no word from you and when I call you have gone to parts unknown leaving me bereft and sick and sinking into blackness


a sharp awakening

with the squabble of crows

five years without you


THE REST OF MY LIFE


you walk me to my door but say no good night give me no hug no kiss just turn and leave me standing with no explanation no understanding and for days afterwards no word from you and when I…


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Adelaide Shaw
Adelaide Shaw
07 déc. 2023
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Thanks Billie. will work on this

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Gavin Austin
Gavin Austin
06 déc. 2023

Thanks again, everyone, for your wonderful poetry, shared thoughts and kind comments.

I have very much enjoyed the experience of being the featured poet for November.

Take good care and keep well.

Regards,

Gavin

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
07 déc. 2023
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Thank you so much, Gavin, for being with us for the whole month of November.

_()_

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Billie Dee
Billie Dee
04 déc. 2023

#1---3Dec23


Scape


Even though I'm asleep, I know this is a dream. The appaloosa I'm riding knows it, too----as we gallop on together, chasing the ever-distant yonder.


open bedroom window. . .

a hint of jasmine perhaps


---Billie Dee, USA


feedback welcome

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Billie Dee
Billie Dee
06 déc. 2023
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Well, my punctuation is quite deliberate---old school, perhaps, where the adverb "too" is usually set off by commas in the middle of a sentence. I've substituted the em-dash for the second comma to indicate a slight caesura, and to keep the first PP from looking cluttered with dangled punctuation. It's a habitual gimmick of mine in stream-of-conscious writing. It can also indicate taking a breath in a run of pressured speech. We may need to differ in our opinions on this matter. Still, I appreciate your input. It made me rethink why I do this.

I started off with a monoku, then played with the three-liner you suggest. I don't like how the latter looks on the page (…


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Jennifer Gurney
Jennifer Gurney
02 déc. 2023

#1 12-2-23


Divergent


After reading the incredible Divergent trilogy and watching the movie several years ago, I subconsciously taught myself how to wake up from a nightmare. If you scream in the nightmare, you can scream in real life. The sound you make will wake yourself up. Magic. Haven’t had a nightmare since.


middle of the night

at death’s door–

I rescue myself


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Billie Dee
Billie Dee
04 déc. 2023
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I like where this is going, but I agree with Vidya's comments. Keep in mind, a haibun is usually improved when the title, prose, and haikai are disjunctive, yet echo one another.


---Billie

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Vidya Shankar
Vidya Shankar
02 déc. 2023

#1 (02/12/23)

Thanks for the suggestion, @sangita kalarickal


Here's the edited version:


Nimbus


Friday, at last! I step into my house and turn the latch, locking the door and the world behind me. I won’t have to open that door and step out into that world until Monday morning when I would live my dreary day job with its bland, tasteless attires and tedious daily routines, until it would be Friday once again.


monochrome sky

i stare at a crow

staring at nothing


I shed my work clothes and stand under the shower, scrubbing myself clean of the boredom of the past five days. My hair, especially, needs a thorough wash. When done, I go to the mirror and shake…


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sangita kalarickal
sangita kalarickal
05 déc. 2023
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Love this piece, so fun! The only thing I would change would be to merge the second and third lines.

I step into my house and turn the latch, the locking the door and the world behind me.

The broken phrases stopped me somehow.

Loved the ku as well!!

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