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TANKA TAKE HOME - 30th November 2022 | poet of the month - Tish Davis

hosts: Firdaus Parvez, Kala Ramesh, Priti Aisola & Suraja Menon Roychowdhury

Introducing a new perspective to our Wednesday Feature!


poet of the month: Tish Davis


30th November


Tish Davis / Tanka



to the stranger's twenties we strangers add ours all the groceries their mom had to pull back moving again


tanka 2020. Red Moon Press <>


my spoon tapping a can for the feral cats; my brother, homeless, in an unnamed woods First Place 2013 World Tanka Competition


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Tish has most gracefully answered all our questions. Thank you so much.


5th Q:

TTH: Can you give any advice to someone wanting to write and publish tanka? Read both “classic” and “contemporary” tanka and then get into the habit of reading your work aloud. Since tanka are “little songs” consider the use of poetic techniques to enhance the sound: alliteration; assonance; consonance; repetition; etc. Onomatopoeia can also be a great partner when writing minimalistic tanka.

Read the submission guidelines. Don’t let a rejection stop you from learning.


6th Q TTH: Do you show your work in progress to anyone, or is it a solitary art that you keep close to your chest before letting it go for publishing? It’s a solitary art. Most of my tanka prose take years to write. (I do enjoy participating in Tanka Take Home and always appreciate the feedback.)

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Bio: Tish Davis lives in Northern Ohio. Her tanka and related forms have appeared in numerous online and print publications. When she isn’t busy with work and grandchildren she enjoys exploring the local parks with her husband and three dogs.


Challenge for this week: The best tanka you've ever written - share it with us! The brevity and often the ambiguity of the tanka (a five-line fixed-form poem) gave rise to many ways of handling words. Explore.

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And remember – tanka, because of those two extra lines, lends itself most beautifully when revealing a story. And tanka prose is storytelling.


Give these ideas some thought and share your tanka and tanka-prose with us here. Keep your senses open, observe things that happen around you and write. You can post tanka and tanka-prose outside this theme too.


An essay on how to write tanka: Tanka Flights PLEASE NOTE 1. Post only one poem at a time, only one per day. 2. Only 2 tanka and two tanka-prose per poet per prompt. Tanka art of course if you want to. 3. Share your best-polished pieces. 4. Please do not post something in a hurry or something you have just written. Let it simmer for a while. 5. Post your final edited version on top of your original verse. 6. Don't forget to give feedback on others' poems. We are delighted to open the comment thread for you to share your unpublished tanka and tanka-prose (within 250 words) to be considered for inclusion in the haikuKATHA monthly magazine.

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Robert Kingston
06. Dez. 2022

funeral wake

a photo board

filling voids

with a longing

to be young again


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Unknown member
06. Dez. 2022
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Nice. I like it.

I guess I personally would have tweeked it as below.... I dont know if I would experience it, though I have thought of it several times ☺


funeral wake ...

voids filling

a photo board

with a longing

to be young again



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Xenia Tran
Xenia Tran
05. Dez. 2022

#2 - 5 December 2022


Edited version, with warm thanks to Kala:


sweet music

where rain drops meet the flow

of a woodland stream

we recognise the call

to drink from the same fountain


(Original version)


sweet music

where rain drops meet the flow

of a woodland stream

the way two waters meet

within sight of a mountain


(Feedback welcome)


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Xenia Tran
Xenia Tran
06. Dez. 2022
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Thank you so much for your kind words and your feedback dear Kala. I have reworked the last two lines, reflecting more deeply on the events that sparked the poem _()_

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Bonnie J Scherer
Bonnie J Scherer
05. Dez. 2022

#2 Dec 5

Latest version to eliminate the offensive use of “dust” twice and a tweak in the second image:


lone spruce grouse

in a cloud of dust

bathing

tonight I finish with

my fluffiest towel


Self revision:


lone spruce grouse

in a cloud of dust

bathing

tonight I finish with

a dusting of powder


Original:

lone spruce grouse

in a cloud of dust

bathing

renews and restores

our physical being


Feedback welcome 🙂.


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Bonnie J Scherer
Bonnie J Scherer
06. Dez. 2022
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Thank you for your input. 🙂

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Unknown member
05. Dez. 2022


Credits: oil pastel canvas art and poem by Amrutha Prabhu

Feedback most welcome :)

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
06. Dez. 2022
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The painting is beautiful, Amrutha.

b r o a d e n i n g m y v i e w


Doesn't work for me. It's too obvious. Put the words together and see. And again, don't leave so much gap between the lines. Tanka should look conpact and not spread out this way. Just my take. Don't have your poems in bold. It loses its subtlety.

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Arvinder Kaur
Arvinder Kaur
05. Dez. 2022

#1

mother’s reflection

in the evening star

no wonder

my wish lamp soars

soars so fast


feedback welcome

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Arvinder Kaur
Arvinder Kaur
06. Dez. 2022
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Thankyou Xenia !

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