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TANKA TAKE HOME - 18 December 2024 | artist of the month - Prakash Thombre

Writer's picture: Kala RameshKala Ramesh

hosts: Firdaus Parvez, Kala Ramesh, Priti Aisola & Suraja Menon Roychowdhury

Introducing a new perspective to our Wednesday Feature! artist of the month: Prakash Thombre


18th December 2024


Prakash Thombre's experimental illustration in ink.



Prakash Thombre says: The Waiting…a timeless limbo where anticipation and uncertainty intertwine, holding hopes and dreams suspended



The challenge for this week:


Isn't life about waiting... waiting for things to happen or not to happen?

The waiting can kill us at times.

Give this idea some thought and share your tanka and tanka-prose here. Keep your senses open, observe things that happen around you, and write!


You can post tanka and tanka-prose outside this theme too.


An essay on how to write tanka: Tanka Flights


PLEASE NOTE: 1. Post only one poem at a time. 2. Only two tanka and two tanka-prose per poet per prompt. Tanka art of course if you want to.

3. Share your best-polished pieces. 4. Please do not post something in a hurry or something you have just written. Let it simmer for a while. 5. Post your final edited version on top of your original verse. 6. Don't forget to give feedback on others' poems. We are delighted to open the comment thread for you to share your unpublished tanka and tanka-prose (within 300 words) to be considered for inclusion in the haikuKATHA monthly magazine.


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Suraja Roychowdhury
Suraja Roychowdhury
24 de dez. de 2024

#1


Feedback welcome


Midnight Raga


It's past midnight and I've tentatively turned the lights off, as I wait for her. She and I have a stormy relationship. I fight her, until she subdues me. Or I chase her and she eludes me. Sometimes she gives in, but then gets her revenge a short while later, in the deep of the night when she vanishes, leaving me wide-eyed, counting the stars and the sheep and my breaths and wondering why the owl hoots in twos ...


what do I know

of dreams and such

elusive things

long ago I sang a song

I never learned its ending


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Suraja Roychowdhury
Suraja Roychowdhury
25 de dez. de 2024
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So glad you liked it, Gauri :). Thank you!

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Priti Aisola
Priti Aisola
23 de dez. de 2024

Post 1


the house lizard

trapped between a dustpan

and a broom ...

its moment of freefall as i

toss it out of the window


Unsure of this one. Feedback is welcome.


Priti Aisola, India

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Suraja Roychowdhury
Suraja Roychowdhury
24 de dez. de 2024
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A mundane moment, and yet you've made it into a poem, Priti :). I'm not a fan of unfinished phrases, but I think your L4 works well with the 'as i' mirroring the poor lizard's fall :)

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
23 de dez. de 2024

Thanks, Suraja:


it’s the door

that's always half shut

this recurrent dream

holds so much of me

yet to be discovered


Kala Ramesh


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it’s the door

to my childhood

this recurrent dream holds so much of me

yet to be accounted for


Kala Ramesh #2

Feedback most welcome.

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Suraja Roychowdhury
Suraja Roychowdhury
24 de dez. de 2024
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I like this - unfulfilled promise within herself, yet to be detected. I do think at least one concrete image would help.


it’s the door

that's always half shut

this recurrent dream

holds so much of me

yet to be accounted for/yet to be discovered


Just a suggestion to keep or toss.

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C.X. Turner
C.X. Turner
23 de dez. de 2024

23/12/24 #2 t-p


Held in Passing


My father weaves through the rain-soaked street, shoulders hunched against the wind, empty hands reaching for balance. At the curb, he hesitates. His breath unravels in the cold air. Between each faltering step, something wells up, spilling over, unspoken. A gust lifts a single leaf, carrying it beyond his reach.


dimming light

the rhythm of rain

on stone—

a robin stirs

then stills again


C.X. Turner, UK


(feedback welcome)

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C.X. Turner
C.X. Turner
23 de dez. de 2024
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Hi Susan, thank you for your thoughtful observation. The phrase "carrying it beyond his reach" is meant to be metaphorical rather than literal, though it leaves room for interpretation. The leaf symbolises something fleeting or unattainable...perhaps hope, memory, or a longing he can't quite grasp. While it could suggest a literal moment of bending to pick up a leaf, the intention was more to evoke a sense of loss or separation amplified by the wind. The ambiguity is intentional, allowing a reader to connect their own meanings to the image. Your interpretation adds another layer to the scene, which I appreciate! Best, Luci

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Sumitra  Kumar
Sumitra Kumar
23 de dez. de 2024

#2. 23/12/24


1st revision: Thanks Luci and Susan


Driven to the edge?


Wait at the signal

Wait for the wound to heal

Wait for the pain to subside

Wait for peace to return

Wait to reach home

Wait for the food to get cooked

Wait for the test results

Wait for our salaries

Wait for love, empathy…


In the end, even wait for death


the yearning

for a timely rain

clouds darken

as a farmer slides 

deeper into debt


Sumitra Kumar

India

Feedback welcome


23/12/24. Tanka Prose


Driven to the edge?


When there is no choice

Waiting can frustrate

Waiting is non-negotiable

Waiting is life

We have to wait even if we wish to move on

Wait at the signal


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Sumitra  Kumar
Sumitra Kumar
23 de dez. de 2024
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Thanks for sharing your thoughts, Priti. I didn’t intend to link one type of waiting with another as a sequence. I meant it to be random. A person needs to wait for various reasons in different situations. Waiting often feels prolonged and painful, and that’s the only common factor in the list, which is an assortment of ‘waitings’ that are significant and frustrate people, pushing them to despair. For instance, in a war-torn city, people wait for peace to return. 


Wonder if the opening line ‘All this waiting!’ would make it better?


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