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sanjuktaa
May 08, 2024

A haiku in the classic mould, isn't it? I was drawn to this poem because of the striking juxt between L1 and the following lines.And I too felt the presence of layers beneath its calm surface, just like Amoolya did.


Would love to know what you all think,


The poet, however, has this to say about its making.


As to the backstory - a late summer day on a train that stopped numerous times along the way in dusty quiet out of the way places.  At one stop I noticed a few butterflies on some milkweed by the platform and the haiku sort of wrote itself, one of the gifts we get sometimes when we least expect it.


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sanjuktaa
May 09, 2024
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It's so good to have you commenting here, Alan! I am sure our readers would love to hear from you more often

Thank you!

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Amoolya Kamalnath
May 06, 2024

So many layers to this one. The train is stationary but there seems to be a hustle-bustle both inside and outside the train. Between all this, the milkweed pods outside overlooking the train window and may be a baby or small child drinking her/his milk. Such a serene feeling and beautiful imagery. I want to go on that train and stop at that station now.

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joanna ashwell
joanna ashwell
May 05, 2024

This is beautiful, thank you.

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Susan Yavaniski
Susan Yavaniski
May 05, 2024

Wow. Just fabulous juxtaposition and mood.

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Kala Ramesh
Kala Ramesh
May 05, 2024

Beautiful poem. love Ls 2 & 3.


Thanks for picking such good poems, Sanjuktaa and Aparna

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