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HAIKUsutradhar : 21st February 2025

Writer's picture: GauriGauri

A FRIDAY FEATURE


Host: Gauri Dixit

Prompter for February: Srinivasa Rao Sambangi


openHALL is back


OUR MISSION

1. To provide a new poetry workshop each Friday, along with a prompt.

2. To select haiku, senryu, and haiga each month for the journal, haikuKATHA. Each issue will select poems that were posted in this forum from the 3rd of the previous month to the 2nd of the current month.


FEEDBACK GUIDELINES ( Included as a guideline, please do not be constrained by these while proving feedback )


Let the feedback be specific and constructive. Don’t be vague. Here are some helpful lines you could use to give feedback.


What is working for me :

1. The seasonal reference is good.

2. The image is very clear.

3. I love the internal rhythm.

4. When read aloud, the poem flows well.

5. The 'cut' which is so important in haiku is effectively done here.

6. I like the format ...it's short,long, short. Nice

7. I love the indent you have given


Points that aren't working for me:

1. The image is abstract

2. The lines are long.

3. Some words are redundant and can be safely removed.

4. The lightness of haiku isn't here.

5. Abstract words take away the haiku's charm

6. There is no 'cut' (kire) in this haiku.

7. There are two kigo (seasonal words) in this ku.

8. This is reading more like free verse.

9. This ku is reading as three separate lines. There is no connect.

SUBMISSION GUIDELINES

1. Post a maximum of two verses per week, from Friday to Friday, numbered 1 & 2. Post only one haiku in a day, in 24 hours.

2. Only post unpublished verses --- nothing that has appeared in peer-reviewed or edited journals, anthologies, your webpage, social media, etc.

3. Only post original verses.

4. For each poem you post, comment on one other person’s poem.

5. Give feedback only to those poets who have requested it.

6. Do not post a variety of drafts, along with a request for readers to choose which they like most. Only one poem is to appear in each original post.

7. Post each revision, if you have any, above the original. The top version will be your submission to haikuKATHA. Do not delete the original post.

8. Do not submit found poetry or split sequences.

9. Do not post photos, except for haiga.


10. haikuKATHA will only consider haiga that showcase original artwork or photos. Post details re: the source of the visual image. If you team up with an artist or photographer, make sure that it’s their original work and that they are not restricted by other publications to share it. We won't be responsible for any copyright issues.


11. Put your name, followed by your country, below each poem, even after revisions.


Poems that do not follow the guidelines may be deleted.

Founder/Managing Editor of haikuKATHA Monthly Journal: Kala Ramesh

Associate Editors: Ashish Narain Firdaus Parvez Priti Aisola Sanjuktaa Asopa Shalini Pattabiraman Suraja Menon Roychowdhury Vandana Parashar Vidya Shankar

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PROMPT:

21st February

Srinivasa Rao Sambangi


openHALL is back for this week!


Share your best cut and floor your editors!!Give us fresh and original poems, you can do it!


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Looking forward to reading your haiku.

Write on! Gauri

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joanna ashwell
joanna ashwell
an hour ago

#1

 

window glass

the muse of magnolia

in a dance of rain

 

Joanna Ashwell

UK

 

Feedback welcome

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Tejendra Sherchan
Tejendra Sherchan
10 hours ago

#1


spring morning

half moon in the southern sky

star-eater's leftover


Tejendra Sherchan

Kathmandu, Nepal


Comments welcome.

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joanna ashwell
joanna ashwell
2 hours ago
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What rich imagery Tejendra, I have read this several times and have to keep on taking it all in. There are so many layers and the spring moon over-lighting the sky - a sensory delight.

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Alan Summers
Alan Summers
11 hours ago

haiku #1


hint of blackthorn...

an aluminium can of cola

forever differently red


Alan Summers

UK

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joanna ashwell
joanna ashwell
2 hours ago
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I love the opening Alan 'a hint of blackthorn' the prick of the thorn in the image, thought-provoking.

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
11 hours ago

#1, 21/02


serpentine roads

the driver tilts

his convictions


Lakshmi Iyer, India

Feedback welcome

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joanna ashwell
joanna ashwell
2 hours ago
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I like the phrase 'serpentine roads' Lakshmi it brings the movement through the ku with an atmospheric undertone.

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lakshmi iyer
lakshmi iyer
11 hours ago

I always look forward to this open hall!!

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