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HAIKUsutradhar : 09 September 2022

Updated: Sep 12, 2022

HAIKUsutradhar . weekly prompts

A FRIDAY FEATURE

hosts: Akila G. & Shreya Narang

month of September: Shreya Narang



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haikuKATHA - the monthly journal from Triveni Haikai India!

founder/managing editor: Kala Ramesh

associate editors:

Akila G. Ashish Narain

Firdaus Parvez

Priti Aisola

Shalini Pattabiraman

Suraja Menon Roychowdhury Vandana Parashar


Haiku, senryu and haiga/shahai (photo haiku) posted here on this thread will be picked up for Triveni Haikai India's monthly journal - haikuKATHA. At the moment we are not looking at found poetry.

................................................................................................................................. Associate Editors, Madhuri Pillai and Akila G. are stepping down for personal reasons. We wish them the very best. Earlier in the year Associate Editors K. Ramesh and Shobhana Kumar also stepped down for personal reasons. A huge thank you to all four beautiful poets. Associate Editors, Reid Hepworth (from Oct 2022), Sanjuktaa Asopa (from 15 October 2022) and Hemapriya Chellappan (from Dec 2022) will be joining us. A huge welcome to all three lovely poets. _()_ ................................................................................................................................. For some more exciting news! CHECK THESE FORUMS ... Tanka, kyoka and tanka-prose to be posted on TANKA TAKE HOME and Haibun to be posted on THE HAIBUN GALLERY It will help you tremendously if you learn to comment on 'triveni spotlight' 'open sky :: SAMVAAD' and 'thinkALONG' Such good poems are posted. ................................................................................................................................... The poems you post will also be considered for the haikuKATHA Monthly Journal each month. Due to a sudden increase in activity, here are some quick guidelines, for HAIKUsutradhar:

1. From September 2022 onwards only 3 haiku (numbered 1, 2 & 3) per week/per prompt are to be posted on HAIKUsutradhar. 2. Please do not post two poems in a day ... just one and in total only 3 poems per week from Friday to Friday.

2. For each poem you share, please comment on ONE other poem which isn't yours!

3. Post only your unpublished, original poems.

4. If poets have NOT ASKED for FEEDBACK, please don't give. _()_

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Post your best haiku and let's have each issue with your best work.

Poems previously published on your webpage or social media will be accepted.

Poems previously published in peer-reviewed or edited journals or anthologies as well as contest winners that were published elsewhere as such, will not be accepted.


4. IMPORTANT: if any member provides feedback on the poem in the comment section, the poet must decide on the final version and post it on top of the original version.


Or else the original unedited version on your thread will be picked up by us.


On your comment thread, you need to post your revised final version (if you have one!)


Edited version: Your final version of the poem goes first, so it will be easy for our team to consider that for the haikuKATHA journal.

Original version: Your first version of the poem remains - under your final version. The way it is shown here.


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The Prompt


Language is the strongest invention of the human mind. We can convey our thoughts and our feelings. Maybe that's why, our conversations are also so important and powerful that they leave their imprints on the pages of time. They have the strength to change history with every word. Let's have a conversation about such conversations.





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Nitu Yumnam
Nitu Yumnam
Sep 18, 2022

#2 - 18/9/2022


sadhus

the scent of sandalwood

in the breeze


Feedback welcome

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Marcie Wessels
Marcie Wessels
Sep 15, 2022

#2


silent classroom

my teacher speaks

with his hands


feedback always welcome


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Vandana Parashar
Vandana Parashar
Sep 17, 2022
Replying to

My apologies, Dipankar. Yes, I got confused. I have edited it. Your analysis was indeed brilliant.

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Nitu Yumnam
Nitu Yumnam
Sep 15, 2022

#2 -16/9/2022


Revised version (thanks to Marcie Wessels):


dusky dreadlocks

telling tales

out of ashram


Original version:


telling

tales out of ashram

chitchat of sadhus

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Nitu Yumnam
Nitu Yumnam
Sep 16, 2022
Replying to

True. This tells me I must think and change L1 of the first haiku. Will go with the second one for now. Thanks for your help. :)

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I am not sure if this is the right place to post my haiga. I am very new to the site. Please delete this if this is not right and let me know where I am supposed to post. Feedback welcome, if not incorrectly posted.

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Marcie Wessels
Marcie Wessels
Sep 18, 2022
Replying to

You are too kind, @Vandana! Thanks for the encouragement!

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Govind Joshi
Govind Joshi
Sep 15, 2022

Revised

L 2 remark by @Lev Hart.


Brothers meet -

long overdue they agree

the family gathering


Original


long time siblings meet -

your place or mine

a catch-up gathering


Feedback welcome.

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