haikaiTALKS: ONE-LINE HAIKU - a saturday gathering_under the banyan tree
host: Kala Ramesh
15th April 2023
I have a new request and a suggestion to make.
From now on - we take a one-line and try to understand it.
Write about them and internalise them. For your own poems: Only two one-line ku per week, per prompt, per poet.
First post: When you post, you'll make your first post as a comment on any one one-line, which is posted as an example.
You'll give your reason/s why you like it or why you don't like it. Whether you understand it or not. Second post: This will be your one-line ku.
Ok? Is it clear?
Sample poems: a horse being whipped semiconscious as one Michael McClintock Roadrunner Journal - 12.3
stepping on something tender like territory Eve Luckring Roadrunner Journal - 12.2
if only you could cry damaged masks Adrian Bouter Roadrunner Journal - 12.2
Have fun!
#1
drying sunflower seeds my yellow lawn chairs
#2
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distortions discolours the war-torn maps
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feedback please
#2
if only you could cry damaged masks
I could break it up in these ways. I'm writing it in 2/3 lines because I'm haikinfected:
1.
if...
only YOU could cry
damaged masks
2.
if only...
you could cry,damaged masks
3.
if only you could...
cry damaged masks
4.
if only you could cry damaged
masks
The shifts in reading breaks provide very different interpretations.
Not sure if this is what is being asked for.
Me head is awhirl with all this brilliance... Wow!